illegal entry

28 Dec, 2010
Terri

Jingle Awards Week 36
Jingle Thursday Poet Rally Award for Illegal Entry

illegal entry

betrayed  
                            broken
ulcers  
            ugliness
raw  
           rage
gallows  
  garbage
leaving  
       living
  accepting  
          activating
     releasing  
                       renewing
              enduring  
                                    eclipsing
                                 daring  
                                                  daunting

     ~Terri Stewart, December 2010

participating in the Thursday Poetry Rally at Jingle

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56 comments

  1. Jamie Dedes said on December 29, 2010
    ... delighted ... Well done, Terri. Happy Rally ...
  2. Victoria Ceretto-Slotto said on December 29, 2010
    Such a feeling of being violated. Sorry you had to go through that. The words you chose expresses it well.
    1. Mish Viola Segal Foster Lempert said on March 4, 2015
      nice, cheers.
  3. tasithoughts said on December 29, 2010
    You conveyed this raw and perfect! JP http://tasithoughts.wordpress.com/2010/12/29/new/
  4. Jingle said on December 29, 2010
    creative and playful words. sad emotions yet beautifully told. Thanks for the contribution. have fun!
  5. cesar gealogo said on December 29, 2010
    Your words is really wonderful and I love the creativeness of your poem. Love it.
  6. meirozavian said on December 29, 2010
    Full of emotions. Please check mine : http://meirozavian.wordpress.com/2010/12/29/water/ Thank you, have a nice new year!!
  7. Becky said on December 29, 2010
    Wow. So many emotions in this -- thank you for sharing.
    1. Terri said on January 2, 2011
      Thanks, Becky!
  8. Someone is Special said on December 29, 2010
    creative and a wonderful work here.. the shape make it more catchy, nicely done.. Here is mine, ! Wishes ! Happy Rally ! Wish you a very Happy New Year 2011.. --Someone is Special--
    1. Terri said on January 2, 2011
      Special, Thank you for your thoughts!
  9. athursdayschild has a long way to go and much to be thankful for. said on December 29, 2010
    Loved the way your placed the words to give even more form to their meaning.
    1. Terri said on January 2, 2011
      Thanks so much!
  10. Marlee-I Mystic said on December 30, 2010
    You share the emotion of the experience very well, yet with beauty. Good job! Happy Rally! http://mysticmarleei.wordpress.com/2010/12/30/nye/
    1. Terri said on January 2, 2011
      Thank you, Marlee.
  11. Linda said on December 30, 2010
    Beautifully expressed. I was robbed once, and you hit the nail on the head.
    1. Terri said on January 2, 2011
      Thanks, Linda! Burglary is an insidious thing to happen. There are so many worse things in the world that it doesn't seem quite so bad, but the sense of violation, irritation, and loss of faith and security just burns.
  12. Louise said on December 30, 2010
    very creative presentation of a really tough situation -- you wrote it beautifully
    1. Terri said on January 2, 2011
      Thank you, Louise.
  13. Ina said on December 30, 2010
    Very well done!
    1. Terri said on January 2, 2011
      Thank you, Ina.
  14. Anita Wakeham said on December 30, 2010
    Interesting. :0) Anita. http://anitaspoetry.blogspot.com/2010/12/poison.html
    1. Terri said on January 2, 2011
      Thank you, Anita.
  15. thoughtsnotlost said on December 30, 2010
    Wow, so cool and I like how us used formatting on this poem to help create the mood you were going for!
    1. Terri said on January 2, 2011
      Thoughtsnotlost, Thanks!
  16. A.B. Thomas said on December 31, 2010
    Fantastic presentation with a great arrangement of words for impact - lovely!
    1. Terri said on January 2, 2011
      Thank you!
  17. Life: Between the lines said on December 31, 2010
    A definite assault, in words, in state and the read...well done! http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/
    1. Terri said on January 2, 2011
      You betcha! Not something I am looking to experience again.
  18. Gemma @ Greyscale said on December 31, 2010
    A fascinating shaped acrostic! Many pounding tensions in relentless flow!
    1. Terri said on January 2, 2011
      Thank you.
  19. danroberson said on December 31, 2010
    Feelings flowing, anger growing, freedoms lost, at what cost, never forget, or regret, yet if you forgive, it won't live, in your heart. Easier said than done.
    1. Terri said on January 2, 2011
      You are so very right!
  20. A Fistful Of Moonbeams said on December 31, 2010
    a delight to read...thanks!
    1. Terri said on January 2, 2011
      Thanks!
  21. Leo (Leonnyes) said on January 1, 2011
    wow.. Monk, this was amazing.. the structure and the double acrostic type poetry.. the choice of words.. very very beautiful :)
    1. Terri said on January 2, 2011
      Thanks so much, Leo. You are very gracious.
  22. Sam373 said on January 2, 2011
    Not welcomed visitors take every form and opportunity...
    1. Terri said on January 2, 2011
      And just take.
  23. Keshav Ram Narla said on January 2, 2011
    :-) This was fun to read. Thanks!
    1. Terri said on January 2, 2011
      Thanks! I appreciate your comments.
  24. gracefulglider said on January 2, 2011
    wow... profound poem, really like your use of shape too. thanks for sharing. Love and Light
    1. Terri said on January 2, 2011
      Thank you, graceful glider!
  25. booguloo said on January 2, 2011
    I commend you on your self control. I would have used stronger adjectives.
    1. Terri said on January 2, 2011
      Ha! That is the best laugh I have had about this since it happened.
  26. megzone said on January 2, 2011
    Happy new year friend! just one word -- beautiful
    1. Terri said on January 3, 2011
      Thanks, Meg! I find that if I can sit down and write it into something better (hopefully beautiful), it transforms ugly events into worthwhile experiences. The power of words.
  27. David (1MereMortal) said on January 3, 2011
    Passionate write...thank you for sharing.
    1. Terri said on January 3, 2011
      Thanks, David.
  28. lolamouse said on January 3, 2011
    nice to see this poetry form done in a mature way. well done. sorry that this happened to you, though.
    1. Terri said on January 3, 2011
      Thanks so much! I always worry when using "forms."
  29. Jingle said on January 5, 2011
    cheers, glad that you take some. ;)
  30. fiveloaf said on January 6, 2011
    you must be feeling good to be playing with words like this haha! nice! mine for this thursday- http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/02/14/hunger/

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