doors clang open and shut
controlled by anonymous guardian
benefactor, antagonist, never friend
while longing for love or glance
controlled by anonymous guardian
heir of wisdom unlearned waits
while longing for love or glance
postponed but not delayed
heir of wisdom unlearned waits
emptying of pain and filling of love
postponed but not delayed
finding a foothold in new life
emptying of pain and filling of love
benefactor, antagonist, ever friend
finding a foothold in new life
doors once shut, now open
February, 2011
A French Pantoum
Written for Poetry Potluck
Prompt: Aims, Goals, and Ambitions
Explanation: My goal is to create a bridge community between those who are incarcerated and their loved ones on the outside. Opening the doors to healthy, community relationships.
Profound message and well-executed pantoum, c.m.
very nice..
wow! and suddenly people got hooked with our malaysian pantun! usually it is written with a lot of wit (sort of poking fun and flirtatious too) with lots of moral lessons behind it! you did great! thank you for sharing.. here’s my potluck..
http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/03/12/broken-home/
I was taught this form as a spiritual discernment method!
A SHORT POEM WITH WORDS OF WISDOM AND WISE SAYING. THANKS FOR SAYING. I LOVE THIS MUCH
What a very fine Potluck contributon and a very worthy goal. Good luck. Hope to read more on the progress of your project here…
Poem on …
Very good and very worthy.
What a beautiful goal and a wonderful piece. I love the form of this poem and the sentiment as well. Great job!
Happy Potluck
Here’s mine: http://mysticmarleei.wordpress.com/2011/02/07/all-i-can/
splendid pantoum, full of love and beauty. I just loved the story of hope spinned through every line.
Good job. I also could read a rebirth or reincarnation into it as well.
Yes, I think so. That is the story of a hopeful life.
It’s a thrill for me to run into another Pantoum..beautifully done! I don’t know French Pantoum though…seems the same as mine??
Yes, it is the same. It is just what I was taught to call it!
beautifully profound… lovely new beginning!
“finding a foothold in new life
doors once shut, now open”
your words resonate…
http://pinklady-bing.blogspot.com/2011/02/dreaming-of-change.html
wise words.
A+
you use words very well. Nice one.
Keep up with the goals … that’s what makes us move …
Happy Potluck!
I like this poem…the last stanza:
“emptying of pain and filling of love
benefactor, antagonist, ever friend
finding a foothold in new life
doors once shut, now open”
Inspires hope.
An excellent poem.
That is beautiful and haunting my friend.
GREAT poem.
Thanks for sharing.